Sunday, March 29, 2009

In the WOMB....

(This is second time i  trying my hands on poetry..but still the alert note is same ;). Dont blame me after reading this..Its purely yours choice )

It was soulful,It was Calm,
I was IN THE WOMB ,with no harm,
They taken me out,without asking me,
All were elated,even after my pain n pounce they made on me.

I looked around,there was no one I knew,
They were asking me many questions,
But I dont' know how to express,
and what answers to give.

They taught me to sing and to love,
Now I can feel all emotions flying in my blood,
Seen the lobelia n glittering sky,
Felt the airy osmosis,loved them as thy;

Time flied,they all disappeared,
I searched n cried for them a lot,
But no one came to comfort
And hugged me to say I am yours;

Now I am dead ,with all emotions killed,
Vagabond with mansion,
Free from scruple and zeal,
Still my vacuous heart desires for something.....

I want to go back to the womb
where it was solitary,but Love and Peace exist !!!
Love n Peace exist!!


Jinxed Pixie said...

me likes it.. :)

Dhanya said...

Nice :)

ANWESA said...

yes,womb is the place where there is eternal calm..nice 2nd attempt..keep writing..

Amrita~Ams said...

thxs for liking it :)

Amrita~Ams said...

thxs :)

thxs for ur appreciation...ll write more :)

mayz said...

wow...i dont believe this is ur second sounded like comin from a pro...n loved d whole concept

Dream'R said...

Technically once u r dead, ur heart stops how can it wish to go back into the womb?? ..hehe..

it was different from your usual funny stuff but still badiya please miss professional ;-)...btw from now on u can avoid the warning signs...;-)...

Aki said...

now where did that come from?? i dnt think i hav ever read that kinda stuff before...nice idea nice poem and definitely a nice post after the smelly last one :P

peter said...

Yes i am reading reproductive physiology ..coz i have an exam tomorrow and u just insinuated the interest in me :P

gud one's dark and meaningful ..and wow i liked a few lines even though too much of technicality ws there
"Seen the lobelia n glittering sky,
Felt the airy osmosis,loved them as th"

gud and unusual from ur posts :D
loved it ;)

Suyog said...

kya baat hai ............xcllent use of words..!!!

doesnt seems like it waqs ur second attempt...CARRY ON......... :)

J said...

loved the basic theme....but I guess a little more time and u cud hav done it much better....

Jagjit said...

Hi. I loved it. Even more because even I had written a strikingly similar poem long time back. Will share it soon, sooner. You are not bad at writing poems at all, if you think so. Keep writing.

Arv said...

Lovely......... :)

I never thought of it before... all I ever wanted to do was to go back to my childhood... but the womb sounds even better...

the last safe havens for the innocence in this tainted world :(

loved it mate...

take care... cheers...

Mads said...

i loved it!!!!!!!!!
its such a different and unusual topic u hv taken..and written a poem that too..and 2nd attempt..and so awesomely well :O
seriously an awesome one..
the best part of ur blog is u keep experimenting...
whereas i stick to the same funny type of blogging :|
i need to learn something from u :-w :-ss \:D/ :D :P

The Solitary Writer. said...


going gr8

write few more poems yaaaa

n ice nicee

Arnav said...

Nice ..
Keep pouring those thoughts :)

Shrav said...

Very nice! Do write more! me loves it :):)


Shrav said...

I so want to go back to the womb too! :) just like you!

Phoenix said...

liar liar pants on fire...

you write so well and said you cant

shame shame!!

absolutely smashing!!

shraddha said...

lovely doesnt seems tat its 2nd i know u r not lying.
gud nd nice concept..

Faheem said...

wonderful... I wish I could write like that..!!

Ur selection of words is really good..

Harshita said...

The best part abt ur writing is that it is so versatile...

U make us smile, laugh , cry and feel all at one place...

This is an immensely beautiful poem... I loved it...

vanilla sky said...

Beautiful :)
ESpecially the last few lines.

vanilla sky said...

Beautiful :)
ESpecially the last few lines.

Kartz said...

Beautiful. Period.

I must say I like the variety you come up with. To follow-up a hilarious post with something profound as this. Well done!

Keep writing. Spread the voice.

Peace. Have a nice day.

Anand said...

Lol. Nicee..
I like !!
Though, I'll behonest. Regardless of how much i try.. I can never recall my time in the womb...dammitt !!!

Abhinav said...


Chronicwriter said...

c-section operation.. its good:)
i meant the poem was good.. not the operation.. a touche of sadness embodied

- Sugar Cube - said...

Interesting theme..when we all wish to go back to our childhood..your imagination is a step ahead :P

Loved the poem :)

Quite surpirsed this is just the 2nd time you wrote a poem.
Good work dudette!

joiedevivre said...

mummy ki pyari beti

bondgal_rulz said...

Very interesting and very beautiful.

And I too agree with all the above - no need of the warning signals anymore. (though I wonder if they were required ever) :)


crackpot said...

dammit ur so versatile..!!!!!!
I love ur blog bcoz of humorous posts frm u..
but now luv for this poem..
nice work..keep scribbling and posting... :)

Resurgence said...

Gal.... Nice attempt.... the theme was good but I think you need to work a bit more on 'word-play' to emerge as a good poet... waise bhi jab tu achchi poet ho jaayegi to mujhe kuch samajh me nahi aane wala kyunki mujhe poems samajh nahi aate..... :)

And regarding going back to womb... bhai jab aadmi mar jaayega to use sirf do cheejon ki talaash hogi... Moksha (Love and Peace) ya phir punarjanam (Rebirth-- the first step of which is to be back in womb)..... :)...... Yaar tune dono ko mix kar diya..... :D.. :P

Anonymous said...

Perfect flow and rhyme :) and brilliant exceution of thoughts !!

Amrita~Ams said...

hey thxs for ur words :)

Technically once u r dead, ur heart stops how can it wish to go back into the womb??hehe....:O :O :O no i m still alive..:P
for next tym u will not find any alert mess ;)

Amrita~Ams said...

this all cm frm eternal accy brain :P :P...yeah no need to
remind me again n again of last melly post

now if u score gud mark then all credit goes to my post ..u men so???:P:P
thxs for loving it :):D

thxs dear for ur appreciation

Amrita~Ams said...

@J tym ll try to b better than this..thxs for ur comments..
thxs for the visit :)

ya do share it...looking forward for it..:D.
thxs ..ll write soon :)

hey arv thank you..:)
thxs for loving it..

Amrita~Ams said...

oye...i m flattered...:D >:D<
n ..i love ur blog..not bcoz of only funny posts...
but bcoz u write ur heart...I mean ur blog is cute one :D :P :P
n wat i need to learn frm you is smiley symbols..:D :P \m/

@Solitary ..
ll write soon...:) :)

Amrita~Ams said...

oye...i m flattered...:D >:D<
n ..i love ur blog..not bcoz of only funny posts...
but bcoz u write ur heart...I mean ur blog is cute one :D :P :P
n wat i need to learn frm you is smiley symbols..:D :P \m/

@Solitary ..
ll write soon...:) :)

Amrita~Ams said...

thxs for ur words man

thxs for loving it :) :)

Amrita~Ams said...

liar liar..keep on fire :P :P :P

thxs darlo ;)

hey ur a gud writer..u can write better than this :)
thxs nyways

Amrita~Ams said...

aweeeee....hugs >:D< >:D<
thxs ur comment made my day :)
n thxs for loving my poem

@vanilla sky
hey thxs dear :)

Amrita~Ams said...

thxs for ur appreciation...ll write more..
have a wonderful tym :)

hehhehehe...oye even i dont remember wat all things i done in womb :P dammit :P

thxs :)

Amrita~Ams said...

c-section operation :P...
thxs btw.. :)

@Sugar cube
hheh..yup i m step ahead..:P :P
yeah this is my second attemp..
thxs anyways :)

hehehe...haan mummy ki bacchi :P:P

Amrita~Ams said...

oye did i told u...i like ur name...sounds lyk james bond..types....:D :P
ll not give any warning nxt tym ;-)....hope you will handle everything after reading ;)

thxs...ll scribble more soon :D

Amrita~Ams said...

yeah..ll try my level best next emerge as a good poet ;)
oye..but yar..agar tuje meri poem samaj nahi aayi toh tere comments miss karungi..
:P :D
haan dono mix kar diye..but muje tera logic bohoot mast laga :P :P
btw thxs for lyking the theme...:)

@pretty me
thxs dear :)

Aditya said...

Good yaar......poetry and all....badiya hai.......and also congs for the result.....

Mads said...

are u alive? :O
if yes, then post
if no, then post
and thanks for showering all those praises for my cute blog >:D< :D
i will teach u smileys..dont worry che :-w :D \:D/

Hemanth Potluri said...

it was a beautiful write up :)..


Anonymous said...

this is a brilliant attempt. does seem you praticed to give out superbly :)

Amrita~Ams said...

haan trying sumthing weird ;) thxs..n congrates to u also for the same..

yes..I m alive. :P
will publish soon :)
u deserve all those praises that..nyways..:)...

Amrita~Ams said...


thxs buddy:)

@americanising desi
wat a name..kewl!
thxs for ur words :)
btw thxs for the visit..keep visiting :)

Ria said...

nice poem!!

Anonymous said...

An infant thinks so much about coming out of the womb?

Didn't know that. :P

A good sincere attempt. :)

Urv said...

U shud write more poetry re.. U write well :)

Amrita~Ams said...

thxs dear :)

gud to c u alive :P:P
thxs anyways :D

Amrita~Ams said...

thxs...will write more soon :)

Syed said...

OH MY GOD !!!!

ur an Amazing Poet ... when r u releasing a book??

Amrita~Ams said...

thxs syed..
as soon as i will get a publisher :D

Amogh Badwe said...

good work :)