(This is second time i trying my hands on poetry..but still the alert note is same ;). Dont blame me after reading this..Its purely yours choice )
It was soulful,It was Calm,
I was IN THE WOMB ,with no harm,
They taken me out,without asking me,
All were elated,even after my pain n pounce they made on me.
I looked around,there was no one I knew,
They were asking me many questions,
But I dont' know how to express,
and what answers to give.
They taught me to sing and to love,
Now I can feel all emotions flying in my blood,
Seen the lobelia n glittering sky,
Felt the airy osmosis,loved them as thy;
Time flied,they all disappeared,
I searched n cried for them a lot,
But no one came to comfort
And hugged me to say I am yours;
Now I am dead ,with all emotions killed,
Vagabond with mansion,
Free from scruple and zeal,
Still my vacuous heart desires for something.....
That,
I want to go back to the womb
where it was solitary,but Love and Peace exist !!!
Love n Peace exist!!
..........
60 comments:
wow...nice...
me likes it.. :)
Nice :)
yes,womb is the place where there is eternal calm..nice 2nd attempt..keep writing..
@jinxed
thxs for liking it :)
@Dhayna
thxs :)
@Anwesa
thxs for ur appreciation...ll write more :)
wow...i dont believe this is ur second attempt...it sounded like comin from a pro...n loved d whole concept
Technically once u r dead, ur heart stops beating..so how can it wish to go back into the womb?? ..hehe..
it was different from your usual funny stuff but still badiya tha...tips please miss professional ;-)...btw from now on u can avoid the warning signs...;-)...
now where did that come from?? i dnt think i hav ever read that kinda stuff before...nice idea nice poem and definitely a nice post after the smelly last one :P
Yes i am reading reproductive physiology ..coz i have an exam tomorrow and u just insinuated the interest in me :P
gud one ..it's dark and meaningful ..and wow i liked a few lines even though too much of technicality ws there
"Seen the lobelia n glittering sky,
Felt the airy osmosis,loved them as th"
gud and unusual from ur posts :D
loved it ;)
kya baat hai ............xcllent use of words..!!!
doesnt seems like it waqs ur second attempt...CARRY ON......... :)
loved the basic theme....but I guess a little more time and u cud hav done it much better....
cheers!
Hi. I loved it. Even more because even I had written a strikingly similar poem long time back. Will share it soon, sooner. You are not bad at writing poems at all, if you think so. Keep writing.
Lovely......... :)
I never thought of it before... all I ever wanted to do was to go back to my childhood... but the womb sounds even better...
the last safe havens for the innocence in this tainted world :(
loved it mate...
take care... cheers...
i loved it!!!!!!!!!
its such a different and unusual topic u hv taken..and written a poem that too..and 2nd attempt..and so awesomely well :O
*claps*
seriously an awesome one..
the best part of ur blog is u keep experimenting...
whereas i stick to the same funny type of blogging :|
i need to learn something from u :-w :-ss \:D/ :D :P
wowww
going gr8
write few more poems yaaaa
n ice nicee
Hey
Nice ..
Keep pouring those thoughts :)
Very nice! Do write more! me loves it :):)
Shrav
I so want to go back to the womb too! :) just like you!
liar liar pants on fire...
you write so well and said you cant
shame shame!!
absolutely smashing!!
lovely poem...it doesnt seems tat its 2nd attempt..bt i know u r not lying.
gud one...new nd nice concept..
wonderful... I wish I could write like that..!!
Ur selection of words is really good..
The best part abt ur writing is that it is so versatile...
U make us smile, laugh , cry and feel all at one place...
This is an immensely beautiful poem... I loved it...
Beautiful :)
ESpecially the last few lines.
Beautiful :)
ESpecially the last few lines.
Beautiful. Period.
I must say I like the variety you come up with. To follow-up a hilarious post with something profound as this. Well done!
Keep writing. Spread the voice.
Peace. Have a nice day.
Lol. Nicee..
I like !!
Though, I'll behonest. Regardless of how much i try.. I can never recall my time in the womb...dammitt !!!
touching!!
}:-)
c-section operation.. its good:)
i meant the poem was good.. not the operation.. a touche of sadness embodied
www.chronicwriter.com
Interesting theme..when we all wish to go back to our childhood..your imagination is a step ahead :P
Loved the poem :)
Quite surpirsed this is just the 2nd time you wrote a poem.
Good work dudette!
mummy ki pyari beti
Very interesting and very beautiful.
And I too agree with all the above - no need of the warning signals anymore. (though I wonder if they were required ever) :)
Cheers
dammit ur so versatile..!!!!!!
I love ur blog bcoz of humorous posts frm u..
but now luv for this poem..
awesum...
nice work..keep scribbling and posting... :)
Gal.... Nice attempt.... the theme was good but I think you need to work a bit more on 'word-play' to emerge as a good poet... waise bhi jab tu achchi poet ho jaayegi to mujhe kuch samajh me nahi aane wala kyunki mujhe poems samajh nahi aate..... :)
And regarding going back to womb... bhai jab aadmi mar jaayega to use sirf do cheejon ki talaash hogi... Moksha (Love and Peace) ya phir punarjanam (Rebirth-- the first step of which is to be back in womb)..... :)...... Yaar tune dono ko mix kar diya..... :D.. :P
Perfect flow and rhyme :) and brilliant exceution of thoughts !!
@mayz
hey thxs for ur words :)
@Dream'R
Technically once u r dead, ur heart stops beating..so how can it wish to go back into the womb??hehe....:O :O :O :O....lolz...no no i m still alive..:P
for next tym u will not find any alert mess ;)
@AKI
this all cm frm eternal accy brain :P :P...yeah no need to
remind me again n again of last melly post
@peter
now if u score gud mark then all credit goes to my post ..u men so???:P:P
thxs for loving it :):D
@suyog
thxs dear for ur appreciation
@J
yeah..next tym ll try to b better than this..thxs for ur comments..
thxs for the visit :)
@jagjit
ya do share it...looking forward for it..:D.
thxs ..ll write soon :)
@Arv
hey arv thank you..:)
thxs for loving it..
@Mads..
oye...i m flattered...:D >:D<
n ..i love ur blog..not bcoz of only funny posts...
but bcoz u write ur heart...I mean ur blog is cute one :D :P :P
n wat i need to learn frm you is smiley symbols..:D :P \m/
@Solitary ..
ll write soon...:) :)
@Mads..
oye...i m flattered...:D >:D<
n ..i love ur blog..not bcoz of only funny posts...
but bcoz u write ur heart...I mean ur blog is cute one :D :P :P
n wat i need to learn frm you is smiley symbols..:D :P \m/
@Solitary ..
ll write soon...:) :)
@arvan
thxs for ur words man
@Shrav
thxs for loving it :) :)
@phoenix
liar liar..keep on fire :P :P :P
thxs darlo ;)
@faheem
hey ur a gud writer..u can write better than this :)
thxs nyways
@harshita
aweeeee....hugs >:D< >:D<
thxs ur comment made my day :)
n thxs for loving my poem
@vanilla sky
hey thxs dear :)
@kartz
thxs for ur appreciation...ll write more..
have a wonderful tym :)
@anand
hehhehehe...oye even i dont remember wat all things i done in womb :P dammit :P
@abhinav
thxs :)
@chronicwriter
c-section operation :P...
thxs btw.. :)
@Sugar cube
hheh..yup i m step ahead..:P :P
yeah this is my second attemp..
thxs anyways :)
@joie
hehehe...haan mummy ki bacchi :P:P
@bondgal_rulz
oye did i told u...i like ur name...sounds lyk james bond..types....:D :P
ll not give any warning nxt tym ;-)....hope you will handle everything after reading ;)
@crackpot
thxs...ll scribble more soon :D
@resurgence
yeah..ll try my level best next tym..to emerge as a good poet ;)
oye..but yar..agar tuje meri poem samaj nahi aayi toh tere comments miss karungi..
:P :D
haan dono mix kar diye..but muje tera logic bohoot mast laga :P :P
btw thxs for lyking the theme...:)
@pretty me
thxs dear :)
Good yaar......poetry and all....badiya hai.......and also congs for the result.....
are u alive? :O
if yes, then post
if no, then post
:|
and thanks for showering all those praises for my cute blog >:D< :D
i will teach u smileys..dont worry che :-w :D \:D/
it was a beautiful write up :)..
urs..hemu..
this is a brilliant attempt. does seem you praticed to give out superbly :)
@adi
haan trying sumthing weird ;) thxs..n congrates to u also for the same..
@Mads
yes..I m alive. :P
will publish soon :)
u deserve all those praises that..nyways..:)...
@hemath
thxs buddy:)
@americanising desi
wat a name..kewl!
thxs for ur words :)
btw thxs for the visit..keep visiting :)
nice poem!!
Wow!!
An infant thinks so much about coming out of the womb?
Didn't know that. :P
A good sincere attempt. :)
U shud write more poetry re.. U write well :)
@ria
thxs dear :)
@abhishek..
gud to c u alive :P:P
thxs anyways :D
@Urv
thxs...will write more soon :)
OH MY GOD !!!!
ur an Amazing Poet ... when r u releasing a book??
thxs syed..
as soon as i will get a publisher :D
good work :)
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