Sunday, March 29, 2009

In the WOMB....

(This is second time i  trying my hands on poetry..but still the alert note is same ;). Dont blame me after reading this..Its purely yours choice )

It was soulful,It was Calm,
I was IN THE WOMB ,with no harm,
They taken me out,without asking me,
All were elated,even after my pain n pounce they made on me.

I looked around,there was no one I knew,
They were asking me many questions,
But I dont' know how to express,
and what answers to give.

They taught me to sing and to love,
Now I can feel all emotions flying in my blood,
Seen the lobelia n glittering sky,
Felt the airy osmosis,loved them as thy;


Time flied,they all disappeared,
I searched n cried for them a lot,
But no one came to comfort
And hugged me to say I am yours;

Now I am dead ,with all emotions killed,
Vagabond with mansion,
Free from scruple and zeal,
Still my vacuous heart desires for something.....

That,
I want to go back to the womb
where it was solitary,but Love and Peace exist !!!
Love n Peace exist!!
..........

60 comments:

Jinxed Pixie said...

wow...nice...
me likes it.. :)

Dhanya said...

Nice :)

ANWESA said...

yes,womb is the place where there is eternal calm..nice 2nd attempt..keep writing..

Amrita~Ams said...

@jinxed
thxs for liking it :)

Amrita~Ams said...

@Dhayna
thxs :)

@Anwesa
thxs for ur appreciation...ll write more :)

mayz said...

wow...i dont believe this is ur second attempt...it sounded like comin from a pro...n loved d whole concept

Dream'R said...

Technically once u r dead, ur heart stops beating..so how can it wish to go back into the womb?? ..hehe..

it was different from your usual funny stuff but still badiya tha...tips please miss professional ;-)...btw from now on u can avoid the warning signs...;-)...

Aki said...

now where did that come from?? i dnt think i hav ever read that kinda stuff before...nice idea nice poem and definitely a nice post after the smelly last one :P

peter said...

Yes i am reading reproductive physiology ..coz i have an exam tomorrow and u just insinuated the interest in me :P

gud one ..it's dark and meaningful ..and wow i liked a few lines even though too much of technicality ws there
"Seen the lobelia n glittering sky,
Felt the airy osmosis,loved them as th"


gud and unusual from ur posts :D
loved it ;)

Suyog said...

kya baat hai ............xcllent use of words..!!!

doesnt seems like it waqs ur second attempt...CARRY ON......... :)

J said...

loved the basic theme....but I guess a little more time and u cud hav done it much better....
cheers!

Jagjit said...

Hi. I loved it. Even more because even I had written a strikingly similar poem long time back. Will share it soon, sooner. You are not bad at writing poems at all, if you think so. Keep writing.

Arv said...

Lovely......... :)

I never thought of it before... all I ever wanted to do was to go back to my childhood... but the womb sounds even better...

the last safe havens for the innocence in this tainted world :(

loved it mate...

take care... cheers...

Mads said...

i loved it!!!!!!!!!
its such a different and unusual topic u hv taken..and written a poem that too..and 2nd attempt..and so awesomely well :O
*claps*
seriously an awesome one..
the best part of ur blog is u keep experimenting...
whereas i stick to the same funny type of blogging :|
i need to learn something from u :-w :-ss \:D/ :D :P

The Solitary Writer. said...

wowww


going gr8

write few more poems yaaaa

n ice nicee

Arnav said...

Hey
Nice ..
Keep pouring those thoughts :)

Shrav said...

Very nice! Do write more! me loves it :):)

Shrav

Shrav said...

I so want to go back to the womb too! :) just like you!

Phoenix said...

liar liar pants on fire...

you write so well and said you cant

shame shame!!

absolutely smashing!!

shraddha said...

lovely poem...it doesnt seems tat its 2nd attempt..bt i know u r not lying.
gud one...new nd nice concept..

Faheem said...

wonderful... I wish I could write like that..!!

Ur selection of words is really good..

Harshita said...

The best part abt ur writing is that it is so versatile...

U make us smile, laugh , cry and feel all at one place...

This is an immensely beautiful poem... I loved it...

vanilla sky said...

Beautiful :)
ESpecially the last few lines.

vanilla sky said...

Beautiful :)
ESpecially the last few lines.

Kartz said...

Beautiful. Period.

I must say I like the variety you come up with. To follow-up a hilarious post with something profound as this. Well done!

Keep writing. Spread the voice.

Peace. Have a nice day.

Anand said...

Lol. Nicee..
I like !!
Though, I'll behonest. Regardless of how much i try.. I can never recall my time in the womb...dammitt !!!

Abhinav said...

touching!!
}:-)

Chronicwriter said...

c-section operation.. its good:)
i meant the poem was good.. not the operation.. a touche of sadness embodied

www.chronicwriter.com

- Sugar Cube - said...

Interesting theme..when we all wish to go back to our childhood..your imagination is a step ahead :P

Loved the poem :)

Quite surpirsed this is just the 2nd time you wrote a poem.
Good work dudette!

joiedevivre said...

mummy ki pyari beti

bondgal_rulz said...

Very interesting and very beautiful.

And I too agree with all the above - no need of the warning signals anymore. (though I wonder if they were required ever) :)

Cheers

crackpot said...

dammit ur so versatile..!!!!!!
I love ur blog bcoz of humorous posts frm u..
but now luv for this poem..
awesum...
nice work..keep scribbling and posting... :)

Resurgence said...

Gal.... Nice attempt.... the theme was good but I think you need to work a bit more on 'word-play' to emerge as a good poet... waise bhi jab tu achchi poet ho jaayegi to mujhe kuch samajh me nahi aane wala kyunki mujhe poems samajh nahi aate..... :)

And regarding going back to womb... bhai jab aadmi mar jaayega to use sirf do cheejon ki talaash hogi... Moksha (Love and Peace) ya phir punarjanam (Rebirth-- the first step of which is to be back in womb)..... :)...... Yaar tune dono ko mix kar diya..... :D.. :P

Pretty Me!! said...

Perfect flow and rhyme :) and brilliant exceution of thoughts !!

Amrita~Ams said...

@mayz
hey thxs for ur words :)

@Dream'R
Technically once u r dead, ur heart stops beating..so how can it wish to go back into the womb??hehe....:O :O :O :O....lolz...no no i m still alive..:P
for next tym u will not find any alert mess ;)

Amrita~Ams said...

@AKI
this all cm frm eternal accy brain :P :P...yeah no need to
remind me again n again of last melly post

@peter
now if u score gud mark then all credit goes to my post ..u men so???:P:P
thxs for loving it :):D

@suyog
thxs dear for ur appreciation

Amrita~Ams said...

@J
yeah..next tym ll try to b better than this..thxs for ur comments..
thxs for the visit :)

@jagjit
ya do share it...looking forward for it..:D.
thxs ..ll write soon :)

@Arv
hey arv thank you..:)
thxs for loving it..

Amrita~Ams said...

@Mads..
oye...i m flattered...:D >:D<
n ..i love ur blog..not bcoz of only funny posts...
but bcoz u write ur heart...I mean ur blog is cute one :D :P :P
n wat i need to learn frm you is smiley symbols..:D :P \m/

@Solitary ..
ll write soon...:) :)

Amrita~Ams said...

@Mads..
oye...i m flattered...:D >:D<
n ..i love ur blog..not bcoz of only funny posts...
but bcoz u write ur heart...I mean ur blog is cute one :D :P :P
n wat i need to learn frm you is smiley symbols..:D :P \m/

@Solitary ..
ll write soon...:) :)

Amrita~Ams said...

@arvan
thxs for ur words man


@Shrav
thxs for loving it :) :)

Amrita~Ams said...

@phoenix
liar liar..keep on fire :P :P :P

thxs darlo ;)

@faheem
hey ur a gud writer..u can write better than this :)
thxs nyways

Amrita~Ams said...

@harshita
aweeeee....hugs >:D< >:D<
thxs ur comment made my day :)
n thxs for loving my poem

@vanilla sky
hey thxs dear :)

Amrita~Ams said...

@kartz
thxs for ur appreciation...ll write more..
have a wonderful tym :)

@anand
hehhehehe...oye even i dont remember wat all things i done in womb :P dammit :P

@abhinav
thxs :)

Amrita~Ams said...

@chronicwriter
c-section operation :P...
thxs btw.. :)

@Sugar cube
hheh..yup i m step ahead..:P :P
yeah this is my second attemp..
thxs anyways :)


@joie
hehehe...haan mummy ki bacchi :P:P

Amrita~Ams said...

@bondgal_rulz
oye did i told u...i like ur name...sounds lyk james bond..types....:D :P
ll not give any warning nxt tym ;-)....hope you will handle everything after reading ;)

@crackpot
thxs...ll scribble more soon :D

Amrita~Ams said...

@resurgence
yeah..ll try my level best next tym..to emerge as a good poet ;)
oye..but yar..agar tuje meri poem samaj nahi aayi toh tere comments miss karungi..
:P :D
haan dono mix kar diye..but muje tera logic bohoot mast laga :P :P
btw thxs for lyking the theme...:)

@pretty me
thxs dear :)

Aditya said...

Good yaar......poetry and all....badiya hai.......and also congs for the result.....

Mads said...

are u alive? :O
if yes, then post
if no, then post
:|
and thanks for showering all those praises for my cute blog >:D< :D
i will teach u smileys..dont worry che :-w :D \:D/

Hemanth Potluri said...

it was a beautiful write up :)..

urs..hemu..

americanising desi said...

this is a brilliant attempt. does seem you praticed to give out superbly :)

Amrita~Ams said...

@adi
haan trying sumthing weird ;) thxs..n congrates to u also for the same..

@Mads
yes..I m alive. :P
will publish soon :)
u deserve all those praises that..nyways..:)...

Amrita~Ams said...

@hemath

thxs buddy:)

@americanising desi
wat a name..kewl!
thxs for ur words :)
btw thxs for the visit..keep visiting :)

Ria said...

nice poem!!

abhisheksardar said...

Wow!!
An infant thinks so much about coming out of the womb?

Didn't know that. :P

A good sincere attempt. :)

Urv said...

U shud write more poetry re.. U write well :)

Amrita~Ams said...

@ria
thxs dear :)

@abhishek..
gud to c u alive :P:P
thxs anyways :D

Amrita~Ams said...

@Urv
thxs...will write more soon :)

Syed said...

OH MY GOD !!!!

ur an Amazing Poet ... when r u releasing a book??

Amrita~Ams said...

thxs syed..
as soon as i will get a publisher :D

Amogh Badwe said...

good work :)